| Humo(u)r:
| 10
| The history was pretty clever, and made the ending just that extra bit more unexpected.
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| Concept:
| 6
| On the one hand, both concepts are rather overdone. On the other, you combined and wrote them well enough to overcome that.
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| Prose and Formatting:
| 10
| Excellent font use in the latter part.
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| Images:
| 8
| Got sort of clunky near the end, but went well enough with the article.
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| Miscellaneous:
| 8
| Them footnotes weren't as great as all that, I'll admit.
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| Final Score:
| 42
| Wery gud, sir, wery gud. Yeah, you should replace the current fire article. I didn't even bother to look at it before deciding, neither.
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| Reviewer:
| Ж Kalir, Wandering Hippie Salesman 05:53, 10 October 2007 (UTC)
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| Humo(u)r:
| 6.7
| Mostly some very good, if not hilarious, humour that sticks to the point well-the play on the old Greek myth that tied in with the old cave-men-inventing-fire idea was very clever. So was that pyromaniac/pyrophilic thing at the end. Unfortunatley, that bit in the second paragraph ("Say you're being chased by...") tended toward being a bit random...a bit of a 'rant', as it were, though that's just from my view...I do know that a lot of people like that sort of thing as effective. Anyway, the rest of that paragraph was good...though perhaps you could have fleshed out the 'witch burning' thing a little, perhaps integrated it into the history. Or maybe you could have done the whole article from a "pyromaniac" point of view, interspersed it with psycopathic or lustful comments. Still, it remains a good laugh as it is.
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| Concept:
| 7
| A very solid concept-I'll have to repeat myself a little here, but the idea of adding the old Greek myth about fire was a very good one. Still, like I said, the constant might have been solidified by a consistent 'tone', like that of a pyromaniac-after all, it can be rather hard to keep a humourous article about fire, a rather uninteresting subject, very interesting for a long time. Still, you have done a pretty good job at that as it is.
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| Prose and Formatting:
| 7
| No reason to complain here...although in the "Universal Problem Solver" section there were one or two issues with spacing between setences and the occasional overuse of the exclamation mark. Still, nothing that really detracted from it. Good job here.
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| Images:
| 7
| Some good choices, very appropriate and colourful, well-placed, would help maintain any reader's attention-although perhaps something to do with old Zeus and Prometheus might have spiced 'em up even more. Sorry to keep mentioning that, but I though it was a great touch.
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| Miscellaneous:
| 6.9
| Averaged, as usual. I've no idea how else to do it, really.
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| Final Score:
| 34.6
| Geez...looking back I did a lot of sevens. Anyway, not only am I still a noob at this, but I wrote this in a bit of a hurry, so if you don't want to read it at all I'll understand fine. If you do, however, then it's a good, worthwhile article, if not quite at side-splitting point. Hope this helped...I know it's not very in-depth, sorry about that.
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| Reviewer:
| BlueYonder 18:58, 4 May 2008 (UTC)
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