Talk:HowTo:Put This Delicately
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[edit] MrN9000
- What have you been smoking? You want serious criticism? Ok, I liked the start. It got a smile from me right away. The end was disappointing... And I think you need to loose one of the paragraphs in the middle.
You know how you lost your hand a while back? You remember? Your hand, the thing with the fingers that did stuff? You remember? Do you remember your hand? You remember the night it happened? You remember that you were a little tipsy? You remember? Do you remember waking up naked on a concrete slab in the middle of a forest? Do you remember? Do you recall that morning? Do you remember that slab? Did those symbols mean anything to you? Do you sometimes blank out for days at a time and wake up with a bloody knife in your hand? Do you remember that? Do you recall? The... the thing with the hand... your hand and stuff..
Not sure that's helping.
The idea does get a little bit repetitive, but that's obviously the point, but I think you need atleast a new idea or 3 thrown in there to make it into a flyer. But I'm sure you know that. What was the ending all about? You keep doing this with your articles you know. Good starts. OK middle, and then the ending is a bit pants. I keep reading that on the comments people write about your work. You have to fix that you know dude. The end is the bit they read just before voting don't forget. That's got to be the best bit.
